My name is Yuki M. I live in Kumamoto, Japan. First, please let me introduce my family. There are six people in my family, my parents, my grandmother, my younger sister, my younger brother, and me. I am 20 years old and study English in the university. I’m shy but I want to be speak English and interchange you! I hope I can talk with you in English. I’m interested in American culture and language of American music and motion pictures and so on, so I want you to show me then as much as you can.
I also like Japanese history and culture, so if you want to know about them, I can show you them somewhat. As I have said before, I like American music. Especially I like rock music. I want to know what kind of music is popular in your place and what music you like. Also I want to know about your place. Where is your place, how is it, where is your favorite place? And how about your family? I also like Japanese comic book. Have you ever read it, and do you like it?
I am studying English now and not good at English yet I think. (But I like to speak it.) So I hope you understand what is written in this letter. Now I will stop writing this letter because I don’t want to lose things to talk about when I meet you. I’m looking forward to meet you!
Sincerely, Yuki. (250 words)
Hi Zilla,
返信削除It is hard to tell many paragraphs there are in this revised essay. Would you please make paragraph divisions clear by keying in "return" (Mac) or "Enter" (Windows) twice between paragraphs? That will make it easy for readers find your main points.
Cheers, PB
I got it. Thanks for your advise.
返信削除Zilla,
返信削除Obviously you got that I meant, "... hard to tell [how] many paragraphs."
Now how about adding the label "revised" to this post?
Cheers, PB
I've added tha label.
返信削除Thank you for your help, sir.